Cozy Cradle
good writing in English?
My creations reflect the important and happiness aspects of these lives. Through them, the viewers are able to find the feeling of cozy and freshness. My dream is visiting Italy, the cradle of an advanced civilization. Also, it is marked by a great history of art. It would give me the opportunity to view Renaissance paintings throughout Venice, Rome, and Florence. So, I would perfect my desire which is becoming artist and work as an interior designer.
After 2 first sentences, there is no connection word to the after sentences. Help me to fix my paragraph, please, thanks!!!
It isn’t really clear what you mean. I’d say:
My creations reflect the significance and the joyful aspects of these lives. Through them, the viewers are able to sense a warmth and a freshness. In order to develop as an artist, my dream is to visit Italy, the cradle of an advanced civilization which is marked by its great art history. It would give me the opportunity to see Renaissance paintings throughout Venice, Rome and Florence. I would therefore fulfil my desire to become an artist and work as an interior designer.
Note: You can’t have happiness aspects.
You can’t have a feeling of cozy, also that isn’t an appropriate word here.
I am interpreting why you might want to go to Italy. I hope that’s ok.
Cozy Cradle Baby Sling
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